This piece was inspired by the short story The Scarlet Ibis. I find this one of my most influenced and personal piece because it has me speaking for Doodle and what I think he would say. I would think that this was simple.
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I can tell that this piece was personal. You spoke through Doodle beautifully. One thing i would change is "smiles on our parents’ faces and Aunt Nicey’s face." to "smiles on our Parents' and Aunt Nicey's faces." Overall you did a wonderful job! (:
ReplyDeleteGood job Amanda! I really like how personal and touching your piece is. I feel like you spoke through Doodle in a good way. I also think if Brother recieved this letter in the book he would change his ways. In some places, there are a few punctuation errors. For example, in the greeting you need to capitalize brother. Other than a few minor punctuation errors you did a great job. All you need to do is fix those few things and your piece will be prefect! Good Job!
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