http://www.scribd.com/doc/25870348/The-kite-runner This piece of writing was inspired the book the Kite Runner. This book was awesome and while i was reading a few quotes stuck out at me so for this piece i decided to interpret the quotes in my own way. enjoy.
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I really like your piece. I loved how you analyzed quotes from the book. You put them into perspective and made people think. To make this piece better you could try explaining your view a little more. This would help to bring out your voice. I also think adding a closing or introduction will help to enhance your piece. You did a really good job. Your writing made me think, and to me that is the purpose of writing.
ReplyDeleteI liked this piece. It shows your voice and I can tell that you worked hard on this, but I thought that I found some punctuation errors and some sentences that were really similar. I would have liked to see more of what you thought about this rather than what everyone else would think about this. The quotes you chose were good and fit well together. Overall, this is a good piece.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your piece Leigh. UI can see where your thinking and analytical abilities come in. your voice is strong, but maybe questioning more of the quotes, and counter arguements would help make the piece flow better. Maybe a closing sentence or two, to some the whole piece up. Overall it was a good piece!
ReplyDeleteI thought your piece was really great, Leigh. I really liked your idea of analzying the quotes, i thought it was really creative and different. I also thought you chose good quotes to discuss because those were two that really made you think. As Kristen said, your voice did come through really strong which made the piece even better. There were small errors, such as punctation but nothing big. Overall i think this was a really strong piece. Great job leigh!
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