This is TWO poems. I write, and then it's too short. I try to expand, but all that happens is the words get longer. The first was a freewrite. The second has no title yet. Suggestions welcome. I wrote that after talking to a friend about some arts school and then having a weird dream the next night about waking up from this life into another one and wondering if it's actually as much of a dream as sleep. I'm still confused.
http://www.scribd.com/doc/26399299/Blinks-and-Untitled
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Thursday, February 4, 2010
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(Your link is messed up, I had to look it up on scribd) Jena, I really like your poems. They were different than a lot of poems i've seen and I liked that. The word order confused me on some parts but I think it worked for these poems. Good job!
ReplyDeleteOH! thanks. I'll fix that.
ReplyDeleteJena, This was a great poem, but it seems like it wasnt quite finished. I think you should add some more lines and fix the very few puncuation errors.
ReplyDeleteVery deep stuff. Good poem. Real. Wide range of application. True. I liked it.
ReplyDeleteJena, I really enjoyed both poems. They say a lot and it just seems very real. I understand what message you're trying to get across which makes it all the more worth while. My favorite was the first one, no matter how short.
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