Thursday, February 4, 2010

http://www.scribd.com/doc/25942947/Gary-Longooney


I was mowing the grass, when a large Bolivian man walked past, with a crocodile on a leash. As I stroked the large reptile, he introduced himself as Gary Longooney. And the rest, as they say, is history.

Do whatever you please

5 comments:

  1. I thought this was actually a really good story. it was interesting and kind of mysterious. I think if you just extend it then it would be much better.

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  2. This is a greay story. It was so interesting and different. It wasnt like a regular boring english essay or something. Your imagination is awesome and quite funny. I enjoy your writing style and I look forward to reading more.

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  3. I enjoyed the story, but i feel you could have described the plot and the setting a little more. I did enjoy your charecter, however. Overall, good job.

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  4. This was a good story. Your description is really clear and I like the banana-smuggling twist. You should make it longer, though, like adding a little more background to the events of the story.

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  5. I really liked this piece Mitch. It flowed really well and it had an element of suspense. I liked the cliffhanger ending, but I feel like it could be a little but longer.

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