This piece was from a freewrite when Ms. Duffy first read from The Last Lecture. This piece shows the effect the death of a loved one has on different people. The file didn't upload right so its not double spaced sorry.
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Justin. First Your title caught my eye, knowing it's a touchy subject i already knew this piece was going to be emotional. And, sure enough it was. The way you put your character john as a first person narrator, really made the story connectable and feel like you were there. a couple grammar and punctuation errors that are quite minor, but otherwise, great piece.
ReplyDeleteInteresting title Justin. I liked how John was a good narrator and mad you feel like you were right there with him. I thought that Death was a good title and very attracting. I liked this piece.
ReplyDeleteInteresting title Justin. I liked how John was a good narrator and mad you feel like you were right there with him. I thought that Death was a good title and very attracting. I liked this piece.
ReplyDeleteInteresting title Justin. I liked how John was a good narrator and mad you feel like you were right there with him. I thought that Death was a good title and very attracting. I liked this piece.
ReplyDeleteJustin, I re-read your piece over and over at least 3 times. I really felt a wave of emotion crash over me. Your choice in words, description and characters really had me intrigued. Will you be writing more to this? I'd love to read it. The only thing I really recommend changing is the quotation format. For every quotation, assign a new paragraph. Great work!
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ReplyDeleteI liked the use of dialogue in this piece, and it is one of the only pieces that I have read that utilizes it in the way you have. This piece was one that sparked emotion, and I enjoyed reading it.