I think that you poem was very easy to relate to as a high school student. It can be frustrating when we think about how we did not try to squeeze our childhood out to the very last drops! I think you could make this piece really strong by elaborating on the things that you missed. Specific examples would make the poem seem really personal. I like how clear your emotion is without directly writing it. I I really enjoyed this piece and may find myself reminiscing on those old days (says the 14 year old).
i agree growing up is not fun and i would love to stay a kid my whole life. this is a very well written poem and you get your point across easily. and i dont know anything wrong with this poem so im just going to stay positive.
good job!i liked how you used a cool rhyme scheme! i love the feeling and emotion you share within your poem as well. I think maybe you could make it a bit longer:)
Yes I helped you with rhyming on this one! I thought that you did a great job on it. Everyone experiences the saddness of growing up and not being able to be care free anymore. You do not have to grow up though, you can still stay a kid but be an adult at the same time. Good job keep writting stuff!
Rebecca, I really liked this. I totally agree with it and think you did are really good job. You had good word choice and your poem flowed really well. I know you asked for press but I honestly didn't really find anything wrong with this. Good job !
I really like this piece. My Favorite part was the last stanza. I think people can really relate to your poem. In the second stanza i think the last line is a little confusing, but thats it.Good job :)
I feel the exact same way sometimes! I really liked this piece. The only thing I would change about this is in the 1st stanza, the 1st and 3rd lines didn't rhyme, but the rest of your poem did. So, if you could find a way to make them rhmye I think your poem would flow better.
I thought that this was a very cute poem Rebecca (: I think that you could probably include some more elaborate word choice, and also I know for a fact that you don't have a pup... so I had some serious problems with that line.. I'm just messing, it was a great poem! I think it is very easy to relate to and I enjoyed reading it!
I think that you poem was very easy to relate to as a high school student. It can be frustrating when we think about how we did not try to squeeze our childhood out to the very last drops! I think you could make this piece really strong by elaborating on the things that you missed. Specific examples would make the poem seem really personal. I like how clear your emotion is without directly writing it. I I really enjoyed this piece and may find myself reminiscing on those old days (says the 14 year old).
ReplyDeletei agree growing up is not fun and i would love to stay a kid my whole life. this is a very well written poem and you get your point across easily. and i dont know anything wrong with this poem so im just going to stay positive.
ReplyDeletegood job!i liked how you used a cool rhyme scheme! i love the feeling and emotion you share within your poem as well. I think maybe you could make it a bit longer:)
ReplyDeleteYes I helped you with rhyming on this one! I thought that you did a great job on it. Everyone experiences the saddness of growing up and not being able to be care free anymore. You do not have to grow up though, you can still stay a kid but be an adult at the same time. Good job keep writting stuff!
ReplyDeleteRebecca, I really liked this. I totally agree with it and think you did are really good job. You had good word choice and your poem flowed really well. I know you asked for press but I honestly didn't really find anything wrong with this. Good job !
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece. My Favorite part was the last stanza. I think people can really relate to your poem. In the second stanza i think the last line is a little confusing, but thats it.Good job :)
ReplyDeleteI feel the exact same way sometimes! I really liked this piece. The only thing I would change about this is in the 1st stanza, the 1st and 3rd lines didn't rhyme, but the rest of your poem did. So, if you could find a way to make them rhmye I think your poem would flow better.
ReplyDeleteI thought that this was a very cute poem Rebecca (: I think that you could probably include some more elaborate word choice, and also I know for a fact that you don't have a pup... so I had some serious problems with that line.. I'm just messing, it was a great poem! I think it is very easy to relate to and I enjoyed reading it!
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