it's a good story with a lot of suspense, but i wished you would have given a little preview of the first four chapters in your explanation as it would have made it easier to understand. Also, while your description was good, it felt a little overdone sometimes. Also, it doesn't seem like there was much of a plot in the kidnapping if they were able to get out. But again, i have no idea what happened in the first four chapters so i have no idea.
This is great! Your story is very suspenseful! I remember reading your original Chapter 1 in 8th grade! This is a really good story! You should post your previous Chapters 1−4 on Scribd, then post your next ones, too! “A+”! −Phoenix
A fantastic display of whimsy and intrigue.
ReplyDeleteit's a good story with a lot of suspense, but i wished you would have given a little preview of the first four chapters in your explanation as it would have made it easier to understand. Also, while your description was good, it felt a little overdone sometimes. Also, it doesn't seem like there was much of a plot in the kidnapping if they were able to get out. But again, i have no idea what happened in the first four chapters so i have no idea.
ReplyDeleteThis is great! Your story is very suspenseful! I remember reading your original Chapter 1 in 8th grade! This is a really good story! You should post your previous Chapters 1−4 on Scribd, then post your next ones, too! “A+”!
ReplyDelete−Phoenix